For my final elevator pitch, I changed the angle of the camera as that was the number one most suggested thing in the comments of the previous. Other than that, the feedback was mostly positive so I tried to be concise and clear as possible.
Hey Alan, I noticed the improved lighting quality thanks to the change in the angle. I thought that your elevator pitch was clear, as you mentioned who your primary customers are at the start, I also thought it was a good idea that you explained how the business venture does not make a "middleman profit" but rather makes its profit off of advertising revenue.
Hey Alan. I will say that this pitch was very fluid. Your speech had a few step-by-step points as to how the company would operate. I do agree that you could make some profit off of advertising space. Although, it could be challenge to reach out and attract the small businesses who would be willing to buy that space while you also plan to buy books back from customers for half price. What would you say in response to an investor who has this concern?
Alan, The lighting and angle looked perfect and if you made changes then they were good. I would say that the advertising is the best way to make money while your users did not have to spend anything. Could there possibly be a one time membership fee to help with revenue? Your presentation was clear and strong.
Alan, the angle looks very good- the image is clear and you also did a great job getting your point across. In terms of being clear and concise you certainly did a good job of that and I think you've got a great polished concept of your idea. Your acoustics were also very good and you were clear to understand- which I feel has been an issue with some other people's pitches. Congratulations on finishing your last elevator pitch and it looks like all of the time and practice put into this really paid off!
Hey Alan, your lighting and angle is much better. I like how you emphasized that there is no middle man in this venture. Also, you were very clear and concise with your words. The only thing I would try is add more information about your venture. For instance, is this completely free or is there a cost associated with it. Other than that you did a good job.
Hi Alan, I think you did a great job here. I really liked the flow of the pitch and the tone was good throughout. The camera angle is something I had to change as well and I think it made a great difference for your pitch! Maybe adding some more product information would be useful especially for some investors but over all I really enjoyed the pitch.
Hey Alan, I noticed the improved lighting quality thanks to the change in the angle. I thought that your elevator pitch was clear, as you mentioned who your primary customers are at the start, I also thought it was a good idea that you explained how the business venture does not make a "middleman profit" but rather makes its profit off of advertising revenue.
ReplyDeleteHey Alan. I will say that this pitch was very fluid. Your speech had a few step-by-step points as to how the company would operate. I do agree that you could make some profit off of advertising space. Although, it could be challenge to reach out and attract the small businesses who would be willing to buy that space while you also plan to buy books back from customers for half price. What would you say in response to an investor who has this concern?
ReplyDeleteAlan,
ReplyDeleteThe lighting and angle looked perfect and if you made changes then they were good. I would say that the advertising is the best way to make money while your users did not have to spend anything. Could there possibly be a one time membership fee to help with revenue? Your presentation was clear and strong.
Alan, the angle looks very good- the image is clear and you also did a great job getting your point across. In terms of being clear and concise you certainly did a good job of that and I think you've got a great polished concept of your idea. Your acoustics were also very good and you were clear to understand- which I feel has been an issue with some other people's pitches. Congratulations on finishing your last elevator pitch and it looks like all of the time and practice put into this really paid off!
ReplyDeleteHey Alan, your lighting and angle is much better. I like how you emphasized that there is no middle man in this venture. Also, you were very clear and concise with your words. The only thing I would try is add more information about your venture. For instance, is this completely free or is there a cost associated with it. Other than that you did a good job.
ReplyDeleteHi Alan,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great job here. I really liked the flow of the pitch and the tone was good throughout. The camera angle is something I had to change as well and I think it made a great difference for your pitch! Maybe adding some more product information would be useful especially for some investors but over all I really enjoyed the pitch.